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My Two Children

My two children are very different, but they get along well. My oldest child is outgoing, affectionate, sensitive and very concerned about people. My other son is independent, self sufficient, creative and studious.

Diego likes outdoor sports; he enjoys playing baseball and football. In contrast to Hosman likes electronic games, enjoy playing Wii, DSi and others. However they enjoy sharing their free time playing together and talk. If you spend a long time apart, they are surprised.

People say they look like. However I think they are very different in physical and mainly in the character.

Take a look to paragraph 2. Try writing simple sentences. Remember, each sentence is 1 complete idea. If you have 2 ideas, maybe it would be good to change them.

Also, take a look at the use of the comma. Go to extra thing that can help. I will have something about it there.

Excelent try!